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Friday, 24 August 2018

Something Stranded.


 W.A.L.T. make a slideshow about a stranded boat.
in class my reading group read a story about a stranded boat and we had to summarize it in a slideshow.We had to include the beginning middle and end,also when the digger came and when the boat got into the sea. this is my slideshow:




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  1. Miss Morgan27 August 2018 at 15:44

    Hey Grace,
    I like your slideshow, it plays almost like a movie. It was great to watch. This reminds me of what they tried to do with the whale that was stranded on the beach a few weeks ago, (digging a trench and hoping it would float back to sea).
    I think you have met your goal of having a clear beginning middle and end. Well done.
    To improve this even more it would be good to use some descriptive words for example on slide 4 you could say, the boat was pushed onto the shore by sweeping waves... Let me know if you choose to change any of the language and then I can go back and read it again!
    - Miss Morgan

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  2. Anonymous28 August 2018 at 09:43

    Thank you for your comment.I saw the whale on the news but I don't know if it escaped. do you know it the whale escaped? thank you for you'r advice and the positive sides. I will try to fix it up as soon as possible. from Grace.

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    1. Mrs Kelsey Clifford28 August 2018 at 11:59

      Unfortunately, the whale did not make it. It is such a shame because people tried so hard to save it.
      Let me know when you fix it up!

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    2. Anonymous4 September 2018 at 09:16

      Thank's for the reply, I really hoped that it would make it. How would you feel if you tried hard to help the whale but it passed away? What do you think the fishes would say if they had a funeral for the whale?
      from grace.

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